Post by krystalepyon on Dec 3, 2007 0:34:47 GMT -5
This is an odd dilemma, but I'm wondering if anyone else has faced it before. When writing serious fanfiction and not crack, where do you draw the line? How many times in a row can you use Ore-sama before it starts to sound silly in a serious setting?
Example One: Minimum Usage
“I think you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. I won’t humor you. I don’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all myself… I really am a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Example Two: Medium usage
“I think you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. I won’t humor you. Ore-sama doesn’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all himself… He really is a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Example Three: Over-usage
“Ore-sama thinks you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. Ore-sama won’t humor you. Ore-sama doesn’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all himself… Ore-sama really is a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Thoughts? Preferences?
Example One: Minimum Usage
“I think you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. I won’t humor you. I don’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all myself… I really am a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Example Two: Medium usage
“I think you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. I won’t humor you. Ore-sama doesn’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all himself… He really is a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Example Three: Over-usage
“Ore-sama thinks you don’t want to leave,” Atobe replied, already out of his chair and close enough to place his hands on Ryouma’s shoulders. He leaned down and spoke into the boy’s ear. “You chose the wrong person. Ore-sama is not the sympathetic type. Ore-sama won’t humor you. Ore-sama doesn’t feel sorry for anyone – least of all himself… Ore-sama really is a terrible rebound,” he added after a moment’s hesitation.
Provoked, Ryouma whirled to face him. “I’m not-” he cut off, temporarily flabbergasted. “You’re not even the least bit attractive, no matter how much you think you are! I don’t do bestiality. Monkey’s aren’t my type,” he snapped scathingly. However, his eyes were riveted to Atobe’s form, blatantly betraying the words spewing out of him.
“And Ore-sama doesn’t ‘do’ little brats,” Atobe replied, even as his own lips gravitated to Ryouma’s, stealing a kiss that shocked them both.
Thoughts? Preferences?